1. In essay 1, the issue being examined is the Occupy movement and how it has affected Americans around the country. The importance is explained as it having an effect on many citizens of the country.
2. The four perspectives are active protesters, outside sympathizers who are not directly involved, political figures that are against the movement, and concerned citizens who are directly affected by the movement. I had a difficult time identifying the thesis statement in this essay, so it clearly could use some work.
3. The introduction immediately and effectively states the issue at hand and the perspectives being explored, but the conclusion seems to be more of a restatement of the intro as opposed to a solid conclusion.
4. For the most part, I do believe that the essay is effective. The issue is made clear, and all four perspectives are explored. I do feel that the essay may have been a little bit rushed, as it seems like there could have been more elaboration on most points. If I were to give suggestions, I would recommend expanding on each point a bit, as well as reworking the conclusion so it didn't sound like a restatement of the introduction.
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