Monday, February 6, 2012
Paper concerns
I think I may need to split my paragraphs up a bit more, they're just a little long. The transitions could also use work. I really don't know what could be fixed or changed, since I'm not really that familiar with how rhetorical analysis are properly written. I think my arguments are mostly solid, though they could probably use refining.
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Spencer,
ReplyDelete-The paragraphs could be split up. The second and third paragraphs each take up almost a full page.
-The introduction is strong, maybe mention the two ads in the intro as well.
-For the first ad you may need to talk about the target audience and the values of that targeted audience.
-The paragraph about the second add is much better and clear.
-Conslusion is good. It could mention the ads once more.
-I think the transitions will improve when the paragraphs are split up.
-You do have solid arguments but like you said they could use some refining.
-It kept my interest which is really good.
-Overall, it was a really good paper